My favorite rollercoaster is in Euro Disney. It's called Crush's Coaster. I remember so clearly the first time I went on it. I wasn't scared because the rollercoaster was based on Finding Nemo, because Crush is a turle in that movie, and Nemo is an animated children's movie. Me, my brother and my parents hopped into a a shell shaped car. I knew it would be fast though, because there was a height limit. My brother just made it. The coaster stared, slow and steady, into a dark tunnel. I couldn't see a thing. Suddenly, we drop down and down, thinking wenever stop. Our shell crashes down and speeds away. We ride slow now, looking around. There's a gigantic shark staring at us, named Bruce. We slowly enter a room full of jellyfish hanging from the ceiling. Their tenticles almost long enough to swipe over our heads... and ZOOOOOM.We jet into a big room full of nemo characters and twirl around, and then drop again. Now we're backwards, having no idea what's coming towards us. We climb up a big escalator, hoping that this is our last fall. By now, I am having so much fun, but I'm a little scared about how this is going to end... I look ahead trying to figure out where the path leads. But it's pitch dark. Now my brother is holding onto my waist feeling scared. I take a deep breath as we slowly come to a stop at the top of the escalator. 1, 2, 3, WHOOSH! We fall down. My stomach keeps going flip-flop flip-flop. We come to an abrupt stop. It's over. I thoroughly enjoyed that rollercoaster, because of the decorations and the thrill!
Wednesday, August 20, 2008
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I could clearly SEE the beginning when you are just about to get on the roller coaster. you described really well like i could actually see what you felt when the roller coaster just started and headed for the top. but i think you need little more details and described more when you were, after when you came down. i thought it was good when you used sound affect "ZOOOOOM" but it would be better if you had used more sensory details.
I really liked this piece because it really felt like i was there. Adding in the word ZOOOOOOOM really seemed to give the reader a sense of how fast you were going. One little suggestion I have is to do a little showing and a little less telling.
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